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I see a woman standing next to a crown.
Her hand tightly clasped upon her chest.
She stares down the line straight to me,
She says there's a message waiting for thee.
Tell the people that the angel is near.
Tell the people that soon they will fear.
Next time the crow flies into town.


A sword with no end to it's thirst.
Piercing into a young babe's breast.
The air is tainted with putrid sulfur,
Loki is hidden in a celestial shelter.
Our cries, our pains, a source of laughter.
No tears will purge this disaster.
Her hilt is painted with their first.


I see a man sitting on a throne.
His chair glitters with love and fire.
He trembles and stares impatiently.
Broken speech mumbles "and so consequently"
Then we were layed into silence.
We commit this body to the sea
Left floating in thy ocean all alone.


I see a man and a woman next to a crown.
They dance, they laugh and never frown.
Blasphemy is heard all around.
Fear the next time a crow flies into town.
©2005-2010 ~JustKeepSwimming
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Author's Comments

I'm a lyrical writer and I've been unable to find a suitable category. I figured this one was the next best one. If I did put this in the wrong category, please let me know where I should put it :)

I attempted to bring forth some of todays issues in a semi-religious format. As my first attempt, I think I didn't fair to badly. Any critic is welcome :lick: ;)

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Wow, I really like this. You ask for criticism I can't give you any. Reminds me of a poem, I don't remember who wrote it or what it is called, but it's about this demon in a desert who is eating his heart and the last line is something like "I eat it because it is bitter and because it is mine." (or my heart or something)

Anyway, I digress. I really like your imagery. Wonderful.

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<salshep> but then I have a thing for wood
:iconjustkeepswimming:
Awesome! :) thank-you very much for the comment! I can't wait to post more stuff... but school is a drag... and now I have mid-terms....

oh why oh why did I decide to persue a major in PoliSci :P

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"When we long for life without difficulties, remind us that oaks grow strong in contrary winds and diamonds are made under pressure." - Peter Marshall, Writer
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haha, yeah I'd ask myself the samething, lol.

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<salshep> but then I have a thing for wood

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